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Post by Joxcenia on Nov 7, 2004 19:21:17 GMT -6
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Dec 15, 2004 14:36:51 GMT -6
Man...there has got to be someone out there reading our stuff........come on folks! Death and destruction, burnig at the stake, guns, magic, what else could you ask for?
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Post by Phalon on Dec 15, 2004 22:47:39 GMT -6
Food?
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Post by Joxcenia on Dec 15, 2004 22:54:58 GMT -6
It would appear as though we need a concession stand.
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Dec 15, 2004 23:21:44 GMT -6
Ah yes....almost forgot Phalon's bottomless stomach. How about a traveling roach coach just for you?
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Post by katina2nd on Feb 25, 2005 23:39:53 GMT -6
Hey guys, i'm willing to put my neck on the chopping block and give it the or the but it's going to take a few days/weeks, there's an awful lot of reading to catch up on.
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Post by Joxcenia on Feb 25, 2005 23:51:19 GMT -6
Hey Scrappy! Phalon! We got us a reader! Gonna finally get some feedback! Cool! Let us know what you think.
Give it to us... we can take it.
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Post by katina2nd on Feb 26, 2005 0:44:23 GMT -6
Okay, okay, but you're going to have to have some patience i'm afraid. I'll save a page or two a day and read it offline, and don't worry, my critique will be uncomprising and without any favours, so be warned, and be prepared to be
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Post by Joxcenia on Feb 26, 2005 0:46:51 GMT -6
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Post by Phalon on Feb 26, 2005 8:23:46 GMT -6
Now this is just embarrassing. I never figured anyone ever read this stuff and would actually critique it; instead just messing around and writing for fun. Same for the Zena Scrolls, although I know at one time - at the O2 board - it had quite the following.
<shrugs> Ah, well....it'll be interesting to get some feedback. Thanks for volunteering, Katina.
Enjoy, and hope you stick around until the end to find out what happens. I'm kind of curious myself.
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Post by katina2nd on Feb 26, 2005 18:11:28 GMT -6
Right, one page down and nine to go, so i'll give a brief interim review of my initial impressions. Well for the moment I to your prowess with the written word. With me, a book, the same as with a movie, will more often then not grab my attention, or conversly lose it, by it's opening scenes and the introduction of it's characters, and the tone of this tale is beautifully introduced by the setting, the windswept beach and the dark, ominous mansion, and then the two well defined and interesting characters. Sheeesshh, did I just write that, I guess that's just a long winded way of saying it piqued my interest straight away and made me want to read on to see what followed, and I wasn't dissapointed, as we start to gather together an interesting and eclectic cast of characters. Nice possibilities with the "mystic" character I think. So far it's a but let's not rest on our laurels guys. Oh and by the way, that was a bit rude of you Jox, not shaking Scrappys hand when it was offered.
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Post by Phalon on Feb 27, 2005 11:25:44 GMT -6
Ooooo, so you made it through page one, eh? And even took the time to give an assessment of what you've read thus far. Nice, and I'm glad we've held your interest.
Funny, reading that someone was actually reading, made me reread what we wrote way, way back then, (pages 1-3). LMAO, that it all was supposed to be over in a month - a Halloween story. Long involved plot-lines though, and the thing has evolved into so much more.
A big thanks to you, Katina, for giving me the notion to re-read the beginning, and a big thanks also to my Whoosher buddies for making this so much fun.
And Joxie - where's that post you mentioned you were writing....like a week or so ago?
*Poof*
The mystic needs to get lunch ready for the young ones.
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Post by Joxcenia on Feb 27, 2005 18:50:01 GMT -6
I got distracted...
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Post by katina2nd on Feb 27, 2005 19:25:00 GMT -6
Yep, made it through page one and have page two downloaded, though I haven't had a chance to read it yet. I have the feeling it's going to be an interesting journey. I notice that there 's been no action since the 20/2, so come on gang, let's get cracking, or to quote Joxie....
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Feb 27, 2005 23:18:58 GMT -6
Very cool! I can't believe we have a reader! I feel I ought to explain the lack of handshake thing. Being new to the writing scene here I was ubnaware of the rules. I used Jox in a scene without permission so she did the only thing she could. Which was ignore me. If you read the Bard's thread in the first couple pages it explains this. And thanks for reading!
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Post by katina2nd on Feb 28, 2005 17:56:33 GMT -6
"Very cool! I can't believe we have a reader! I feel I ought to explain the lack of handshake thing. Being new to the writing scene here I was ubnaware of the rules. I used Jox in a scene without permission so she did the only thing she could. Which was ignore me. If you read the Bard's thread in the first couple pages it explains this. And thanks for reading!" Yep, finally got an audience, although i'm sure others must have read it. Aahhh, that explains it [ the handshake thingy ] I knew there had to be an explanation, could'nt imagine Jox doing that without a reason. It's really starting to pick up pace quite nicely, with a new arrival [ fresh blood ] mystics, gypsies and ghostly apparitions, I feel like i'm in the middle of a Stephen King novel. Is there going to be an auction for the movie rights? Just finished reading to here..... "Scrappy didn’t wait for an answer. The level of emotion conveyed through the scream was terrifying. She knew she had to do something quick. She removed her other glove and grabbed hold of the pot with both hands. This time the energy exchange was immediate and complete. She dropped to her knees as though she had just touched a hot wired fence. Clutching the pot to her chest she threw her head back and let it happen. She felt herself let go and release from her body. As she stood, now fully in the “in between” she saw her body still kneeling and clutching the pot." on to the next chapter as soon as i'm offline, for now.
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Mar 1, 2005 0:37:09 GMT -6
Cool...glad you are enjoying it so far. Just out of curiosity...and without pushing...*grin*....anything you would have added as a reader? Anything you might want filled in or explained?
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Post by katina2nd on Mar 1, 2005 22:33:55 GMT -6
"Cool...glad you are enjoying it so far. Just out of curiosity...and without pushing...*grin*....anything you would have added as a reader? Anything you might want filled in or explained?" Pushed, hey, do I look or under pressure Up to this point i'd say no . The one "fault" I find, [ if you could call it that ] and this may just be that i'm a bit slow [ euphemism for as thick as two short planks ] is that it seems a little fragmented at times, but I guess this is to be expected with so many people contributing. Having said that though, whenever the story does appear to go off on another tangent, it seems to pull itself back together again fairly smartly. Diverse characters, with, I must say, a very wide range of unusual abilities, a high standard of writing, surprisingly so if you consider how many people are involved, and an intriguing story line that fluctuates between a Stephen King horror/thriller and an Agatha Christie "whodoneit", [ although nobodies actually "done" anything... as yet ] could'nt ask for a whole lot more. If you're looking for a manager to help with the film rights, keep me in mind. I only take 75%, but that's negotiable. P.S. I'm glad to see the story's underway again.
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Post by Phalon on Mar 2, 2005 0:10:07 GMT -6
Yes, a lot of it has to do with there being more than one writer. The different characters off doing different things; alone, or with one or two others. I think it may help flow better in your mind as you read, (maybe - it's hard for me to imagine reading this as a viewer instead of a participant), if you imagine each writer's post to be a different chapter in a book, or a play where the curtin drops after each scene, rather than view it as one long, consecutive piece.
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Mar 2, 2005 0:11:50 GMT -6
IMHO We were just starting to get the groove going early on. You know, feeling each other out and getting to know each other better. We mesh better later on though. And of course we actually discuss things behind the scenes now...lol.
Hey katina thanks again for the feed back. It really does help.
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Post by Joxcenia on Mar 2, 2005 0:13:25 GMT -6
That makes sense, Phalon... with so many writers it doesn't flow like a book usually does. And it would be nice if there was a grammar/english teacher reading who could get out a red pencil and mark up my posts and give me pointers.
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Post by Phalon on Mar 2, 2005 0:19:13 GMT -6
LMAO. Glad you think so, Joxie. That's one of the reasons I title my posts, (like chapter titles), cuz it's usually my character off on some tangent.
And oh, no, no, no - on the English teacher thing! BOLL. OMG, my love of throwing commas and semi-colons in where-ever I think they look pretty would be dashed to pieces.
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Mar 2, 2005 0:21:53 GMT -6
Yeah and how bad would that be for the teachers computer screne? LMAO
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Post by Joxcenia on Mar 2, 2005 0:23:22 GMT -6
My latest post in the 'Scrolls' is full of commas, so that gave me the idea for the english teacher... Word didn't give them a green underline, so I guess the gammar passed muster.
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Post by Phalon on Mar 2, 2005 0:27:20 GMT -6
Oh, so you're supposed to actually pay attention to those little green squiggles?
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Mar 2, 2005 0:27:50 GMT -6
Did someone say pass the mustard? Is it time for breakfast already?
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Post by Joxcenia on Mar 2, 2005 0:34:41 GMT -6
Well... I don't always... not when I wrote it the way I wanted and the green line be damned.
Mustard with breakfast? What are you eating with mustard?
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Post by Scrappy Amazon on Mar 2, 2005 14:47:18 GMT -6
MMMMM....sausage!
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Post by Joxcenia on Mar 2, 2005 18:04:42 GMT -6
Never ever thought of that. I knew a girl when I was a teenager who wouldn't eat fried eggs unless the egg was mixed up with fried potatoes.
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Post by katina2nd on Mar 2, 2005 18:13:38 GMT -6
"Yes, a lot of it has to do with there being more than one writer. The different characters off doing different things; alone, or with one or two others. I think it may help flow better in your mind as you read, (maybe - it's hard for me to imagine reading this as a viewer instead of a participant), if you imagine each writer's post to be a different chapter in a book, or a play where the curtin drops after each scene, rather than view it as one long, consecutive piece." Good advice. I am getting used to it more now, and when something happens that seems disconnected from what preceded, I just think, well hang in there and it will all come together eventually. Probably would have been much simpler reading it much earlier as it was being written, but it's to late for that now, and hey, what's the good of reading a novel anyway if it doesn't make one exercise the old grey matter a bit. "IMHO We were just starting to get the groove going early on. You know, feeling each other out and getting to know each other better. We mesh better later on though. And of course we actually discuss things behind the scenes now...lol. Hey katina thanks again for the feed back. It really does help" That's understandable, it must have taken a while for you guys to "mesh" together, and iron out any bugs in the system. Noticed a discernable change in style [ about page four I think ] where Phalon actually wrote a scene for Guru which transported him back to the civil war, so I guess this is the benefit of discussing things "behind the scenes" as you say. "That makes sense, Phalon... with so many writers it doesn't flow like a book usually does. And it would be nice if there was a grammar/english teacher reading who could get out a red pencil and mark up my posts and give me pointers." Sorry Jox, can't help you out there i'm afraid, I just chuck in a comma or apostrophe wherever I think appropriate. But I guess one quick glance at my writing would tell you that. Ugh, sausages and mustard at this hour of the morning. Cereal, tea and toast is about all I can face up to for breakfast.
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