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Post by Mini Mia on Aug 29, 2018 18:01:26 GMT -6
Please let us know what you think of the Dancing With Fools story train here. Thanks. 
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Post by Phalon on Aug 31, 2018 4:30:20 GMT -6
Oooooo! Nice!
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 2, 2018 20:19:59 GMT -6
Lovely.
You didn't start your thread with the board title ... and it gave me an idea. Why not have different story threads? All are within the same world, but not necessarily in the same neighborhood. Kind of like how Jason jumped around between worlds on the Whoosher House board. Perhaps he should have had his own thread?  There could be one main thread for when everyone is together? And separate threads for when they're apart?  It was just an idea that popped out at me.
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Post by moonglum on Sept 3, 2018 0:24:45 GMT -6
Thanks Joxie. It was intentional. Without giving too much away, it had to do with where they are at this moment. I rewrote the first part. Originally it was a bit more eccentric, well a lot more, LOL.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 3, 2018 15:29:18 GMT -6
You didn't start your thread with the board title ... and it gave me an idea. Why not have different story threads? All are within the same world, but not necessarily in the same neighborhood. Kind of like how Jason jumped around between worlds on the Whoosher House board. Perhaps he should have had his own thread? There could be one main thread for when everyone is together? And separate threads for when they're apart? It was just an idea that popped out at me.
If you like my idea, and you do decide to have multiple story threads for various parts of story settings, you might want to create a thread where you link each post in the order they should be read.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 3, 2018 22:30:26 GMT -6
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Post by moonglum on Sept 5, 2018 0:39:26 GMT -6
After reading that link I went back and read some of my posts. It was one of those 'OH YEAH I see what he means' moments. It's basically the difference between 'show and tell', but it's something I now realise I'm guilty of.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 5, 2018 4:20:30 GMT -6
Isn’t it funny how you don’t see it until it’s brought to your attention? Why did I not see it in my writing before. I’ve got a lot of work ahead of me cutting all those useless words out, and adding in better words.
I’m just glad I learned it before publishing anything.
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Post by Phalon on Sept 5, 2018 5:07:10 GMT -6
I hadn't. Definitely going to read later; I started but am quickly running out of time this morning. The little bit I did just read though, sounded very interesting...and useful.
Love what you're doing here in this new story, Moonglum.
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Post by moonglum on Sept 5, 2018 10:14:15 GMT -6
I think it's so easy to get absorbed with the story that you rush ahead to tell it forgetting how it will be seen by the reader. If you're not careful you end up writing only part of the story because your mind fills in the detail as you write/read it.
Why thank you, your wordliness. Believe it or not it actually started out as a comedy, but after a while I could see it wasn't working so it lived in 'the drawer' for some years. When Joxie suggested a new story thread, I thought I would see what could be done with it.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 5, 2018 21:45:19 GMT -6
I think it's so easy to get absorbed with the story that you rush ahead to tell it forgetting how it will be seen by the reader. If you're not careful you end up writing only part of the story because your mind fills in the detail as you write/read it.
I think it could also be seen as a 'holding place' for the rewrite or editing phase. I tend to get down the bare bones of a story ... the flesh takes longer, and needs more time. But, I'm not a good editor/rewriter ... and I skip the 'holding places' without filling them out as they should be. Hopefully this article/lesson will help improve my editing/rewriting, and I'll see the parts that need more fleshing out from now on.
One can hope.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 7, 2018 23:07:34 GMT -6
:popcorn:
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 7, 2018 23:07:45 GMT -6
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Post by moonglum on Sept 8, 2018 1:07:23 GMT -6
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Post by Phalon on Sept 21, 2018 5:09:34 GMT -6
Chilling, Moonglum.
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Post by Mini Mia on Sept 21, 2018 22:55:24 GMT -6
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Post by Phalon on Oct 16, 2018 4:54:06 GMT -6
Loving every post of it so far, Moonglum!
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Post by moonglum on Oct 16, 2018 14:13:23 GMT -6
Thank you Phalon. Truth be known, I'm enjoying writing it. I've just got to maintain it now.
I finally got hold of new copies of 2 of James Herbert's books. The Dark, and The Fog. After I wrote the last piece of DWF I realised just how much of an influence he has had on me. I haven't copied plots or characters, but when i read through it, the style does owe something to JH.
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Post by Phalon on Oct 17, 2018 4:05:36 GMT -6
I've done something similar. When reading Jane Austen novels, I tend to speak like her characters would....thankfully, I've only done this in my head!
Wait. James Herbert - he sounds familiar; I think I read something by him years ago on your suggestion.
<does drill on James Herbert books>
Ah, yes...The Magic Cottage.
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Post by moonglum on Oct 17, 2018 5:43:35 GMT -6
I am not such a fan of his later novels. His early ones like The Fog, The Survivor, The Dark and Rats, I can't get enough of them. I must have read them hundreds of times until they became well thumbed, dogeared and finally fell to pieces.
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Post by Mini Mia on Oct 17, 2018 18:03:48 GMT -6
Being easily influenced by other writers is a good thing to be able to do if you're a tie-in writer. I think that by the time you've gone through a number of rewrites/revisions, you should have lost that influence.
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Post by Phalon on Nov 29, 2018 6:23:09 GMT -6
Ooooo....a double treat!
Glad to see posts in both stories, Moonglum!
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Post by Phalon on Jul 21, 2019 7:48:45 GMT -6
Got a moment to catch up what you've posted the past couple of weeks, and aside from the story itself being edge-of-my-seat interesting, you have a wonderful knack as a writer, Moonglum, for painting a vivid scene. Your descriptive writing is just excellent.
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Post by moonglum on Jul 22, 2019 11:37:02 GMT -6
Thanks for your interest and those kind words Phalon. I'm still not sure where it's going though, but I'm having fun. That's the main thing.
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Post by Phalon on Mar 1, 2020 8:26:21 GMT -6
BOLL, Moonglum! I'm so glad you explained cricket in the last post! I drilled "The Oval" when you wrote about it in the previous post because I'd never heard of it, but could not figure out what people tied to huge stakes and getting stoned while someone defended them with a hammer could possibly mean.
Blame it on this Yank's ignorance of how cricket is played!
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Post by moonglum on Mar 2, 2020 0:46:55 GMT -6
I've been reading a book called 'The Five' by Hallie Rubenhold. It's about the lives of the victims of Jack the Ripper. It made me realise how so-called facts are looked at historically. Stories passed down through the ages get distorted by media and in the telling. Tazer's misinterpretation of bits of misinformation seemed typical of a young mind at work.
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Post by Phalon on Mar 3, 2020 5:58:38 GMT -6
To be sure!
And just to clarify, my "boll" was at myself for not knowing the basics of sports - for some reason, I was confusing cricket with a sport more like soccer than baseball.
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Post by moonglum on Mar 3, 2020 7:21:44 GMT -6
No clarification is necessary. I don't understand the rules of cricket, and I've played it! It's one of those games you are either fanatical about or you loathe, ( a bit like Marmite), I hate it.
(Marmite, on the other hand, love it!)
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Post by Phalon on Dec 12, 2020 6:40:05 GMT -6
Ooooo! A case of 'it's not the computer, it's the operator', and d@mn those sensitive keyboards!
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